The most helpful piece of advice I received
from Megan was to focus strictly on social class and gender instead of
incorporating race in my exploratory essay. I believe that this is the most
helpful piece of advice I received from Megan because it will help me focus on
a more specific topic. Within this topic I can find more valuable information
to analyze.
The least helpful piece of advice I
received from Megan was to make sure the space between my paragraphs are only
doubled spaced. I believe that this is
the least helpful piece of advice because revising grammatical and punctual incorrect
errors within your writing is the last stage of revision and holds the less
weight.
After reading your comments I am
now curious as to what was your plan for critiquing my paper? Do you think that
discussing race in my paper will devalue my paper being that race can create controversy?
When revising my paper I plan to
eliminate race from my paper and strictly analyze social class and gender. I
will discuss how the authors of the articles argued student’s inability to fully
progress based on student’s social class and gender. Discussing how the authors of the articles
argued student’s inability to fully progress based on student’s social class
and gender will allow me to analyzing the articles in the perspective of the
authors instead of summarizing the articles. Also, when I revise my paper, I
will be careful in choosing questions that I cannot answer. The last process of
my revision is correcting any grammatical and punctual incorrect errors that I
may have.
A lot of people underestimate the value of grammar. Yes grammar may be the last stage of revision, but it is also an important step because it helps to make your paper flow and it makes your writing sound intelligent, which is important. You said that you will be careful in choosing questions that you cannot answer. Are you going to chose questions that you can or cannot answer? I was confused with my paper in whether or not I was supposed to ask questions and then answer them or not.
ReplyDeleteBrian, I also had the issue of not asking questions that I did not have the answer to. I thought the point of the paper was to ask a question and then answer it, which is what I did. I will also change that in my revision. I think that we are so used to asking questions and answering them in assignments that we forget to analyze the writings and share why we are left with the question. I also think that you will be able to get much for information as you focus on gender in your paper.
ReplyDeleteMy plan for critiquing your paper was to (a) make sure you were finding and explaining the connections among the articles and (b) make sure you weren't simply summarizing (as that was something you addressed in your self assessment).
ReplyDeleteI think you could either take or leave the race issue. Your paper will be fine without it. However, I don't think you will cause controversy if you do include it because you are simply explaining what the authors of the readings are saying. I asked if you wanted to include race because you indicate that you will discuss race in the introduction of your paper, but then never really touch on it in the body of your paper.